I liked it...Good luck God bless!

um...short, and not descriptive. not a good story.

Hey Lisa I can know review. That was a great story.This is Charlotte by the way.

Not bad, it started out well, but you ended pretty abruptly. If you don't feel like you can write about it in detail, then try doing a different subject, because thats the whole point is the emotional situation and the persons reaction. Anyway not bad, please check out Dream Worlds.

This is really scary... Are you going to continue?? Make chapters, I mean. It's pretty good, except I dont understand why did Jack rape Ellie. I mean, they are getting along and stuff, why did Jack push it? Okay, anyway, my point is that you should make chapters. I like the story alot!!

oh wow..that's so sad. Is this going to continue? Becvause it just seems, incomplete. Good job, though. "Good job" Ugh, so cliche.

That's so rad, man!

there, much better.