| Reviews for US Marine Corps |
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FantasizedMusic 8/5/05 . chapter 1Just like "I am no king," there is an interesting backdrop behind what is actually written that would make for a great story or play. I also found it intriguing that you used a female in the rage-against-the-machine model instead of a male. There's something to be said for the unacknowledged others who also cannot stand the way some things are run. I think it's clear that you favor the superior officer, the "interviewer." That's not usual either, so you get double marks on originality and switched positions. |
JarHead1775 2/4/05 . chapter 1 What is this crap? |
Daughter of the Roses 2/3/05 . chapter 1This play is much too short to develop a clear personality for Black. You dialog is stilted, unrealistic, and before you shoot off your mouth about the Marine Corps, you might want to do a little research before you start. It has potential, but you really need to revisit this and fix your errors. |
Senorita Diabla 2/1/05 . chapter 1Interesting... I like the attitude Ms. Black had toward things, very backwards of today's society but definitely honorable! I don't think I've ever loved something with a rigid schedule, I'm too lazy P. The interviewer was... well, a jackass! But from the experience I've had with officials in the military, that's spot on! You have very strong characterization and the dialog flows nicely, great job! chochang913 |
WriterGrl11 1/29/05 . chapter 1Hm, very thought-provoking. I wonder if this could actually happen... |
Nathan Murray 1/29/05 . chapter 1Hm . . . lol. Very crisp dialogue, though this was far too brief as anything other than an exercise, as there was no deinite purpose and the idea of a pacifist Marine isn't enough to justify it. Why are they talking? |
Kantessa 1/28/05 . chapter 1That is funny. I am very much a fan of your style. It's light, and creative. Get PUBLISHED, damn it! |