Nice. Again, try to stay away form the aabb rhyming, but otherwise i liked it, especially "the clock goes tic/the gun is cocked/the clock goes tock/the door's still locked." Though it might sound a bit better with the lines rhyming with tic and clock, every other. And I also really liked the first 9 lines.

Wow! I was stunned. This was wonderfully written and had me at the edge of my seat all the way to the end. Keep writing!

Wonderful poem. Very touching and sad!

An interesting poem. Well written, the imagery was awesome. Also, thank you for the revies on "Tired" that I wrote. I found it very funny, and it contrasts with another review I got for that poem. Keep writing.

This poem brought tears to my eyes. It brought up many things i'd like to stay buried but it was good just the same.

~aware!~

This is awesome...i just hope you dont really do that.

This is such a powerfully sad poem. The emotioins you describe and then show in the middle about the family life of this person. This poem was beautifully written and so sad. NIce job.

*Silent Writer*

Thank you for your review on "TRoE: Chapter 5".

So powerful, im shaking now, and just wow...Omg, wow. (Not my best when im tured, but this is good.)

oh, such sadness. well written, but to see such sadness in a young man. you write well. kimmie

thanks for your review...i just started this like two days ago...really good poems...@_@ my poems suck compared to that...

Whoa...*stands there stunned* This was-really, really good, I love it...I just hope you're not really feeling this way...And I hope it all works out...But it is amazingly well-written. Keep it up. --pammy--

Beautifully tragic!

wow that's really sad... nice rhyme...not what i expected definitely

I really hate repeating myself, but I cannot find words perfect enough to describe your cornicopia of talent. This is sad, but in a happy way.

you made me cry. ive come so close to doing that so many times its not even funny anymore. im still crying. very well written. lots of emotion. rock on

xoxo

SI