Interesting and original idea for a poem...the repition of "For you" was very powerful...really showed how the narrator was almost a slave to the "you" in the poem...keep writing!

nice repetition of "for you" everywhere. i don't know how you managed to do that without becoming redundant, but you did. *claps hands* ... great emotion, too, and sentiment. what you say with this is sure to be echoed by a lot of people. i like the whole flow of it, the way it tells the tale, and then breaks off at an ending. to me that says it's complete. well done =) do me a favour and check out something i've written?

~k8

Yep. Yep. True, true, true, reminding me of what was sung by the soldiers. They said to themselves, we've been under orders, but Mr. Fox said, yes, but even the dumbest soldiers know when to disobey orders. But that's just what I got from it. March on, young drummer boy! Even though you're dead, we still hear you! We still hear you! But, on a side note, this was a very good poem.

Beautiful! I love your repitition. very powerful ending.Aaron