Wow...I wasn't expecting that. But it's a really good story so far, and I want to find out what happens.

Gosh, I'm sorry that I don't have a better review or something...

That...is a wonderful, awesome story. Sorry I couldn't really express myself any better than that.

love you story, you're talented!

Dude, I didn't see that one coming at all! I mean , I knew Maddy's mum was a artist, but the link between Maggie and her just didn't click! Guess I'm a bit slow :: scratches head :: Please update soon!

Please hurry with a update! I'm begging you! This is such a good story!

I like the description of the rusted old swingset...

Crying over viruses...I never even thought of them that way, though. It is really sad, once you think of it.

I really liked the swinging thing that Linda wrote...it was good imagery and pretty. And Maddy seems like he would be really nice...sorry, I know that's a bit obvious.

That sounds really sad...it's like in being the girlfriend of him, she's automatically forgotten, and that's the only way people identify her now.

Hi,

I really enjoyed this second chapter. Like I said before, I admire your straightforward sentences that are without hindrance of too much detail. . .obviously I struggle with that. The character of Linda Jones is easy to identify with, too. A couple lines confused me, probably because I don't understand your metaphor/analogy/whatever it is:

"Maddy turned around, refusing to let his heart look at her."

Can hearts look? and

"Besides, they weren't known to be Stephen Kings in that class."

King is an author. . .are you trying to say that the class was collectively uninterested in writing, or making some obscure reference to Carrie?

Anyway, I had a good time reading and hopefully I'll read more later. Also, I was wondering if you could clear up one thing for me. . .how did those sentences of mine make your "brain hurt"? I would really appreciate you expounding upon that statement a bit so I'll know what to fix=)

Great opening chapter. I love it, it's catchy and not cliched and your style is clear and to-the-point. I'm looking forward to an amusing read, and I hope to be back.

(Right now I'm on a review mission to see how many fp.com authors believe in reviewing back;)

I enjoy it is something fun to read but you really need to try to update it more that way a lot more ppl will be really in to reading it

interesting. noy much of a plot but oh well. update soon!

cool story! i rele like it so far :D

I love this story!