Grammar. But you don't need me to rag on you for that. Nice in reply to your review on DreyonLegacy's thing. EW GROSS, OF COURSE I'M GOING TO ANSWER! THERE SHALL BE NO LICKING OR NUZZLING OF ANY SORT! I'M TELLING WOMBAT!Take that! *grin*Good job.

For Gosh sake man, edit it! You have grammatical errors in your summary! and of course story! It would be a nice, intriguing beginning if I wasn't so picky about grammar...

This soudns good so far, I love how you have luck in it, I started a story a while ago with fate and etc. but never got anywhere, having superior beings has always appealed to me.