|Reviews for Empty|
| Dracula Lord of the Vampires 5/15/05 . chapter 1
Good. Precise description of something that can be interpreted as many things.
| CyanideKiss 4/8/05 . chapter 1
I like this poem, it kind of matches the way I feel at the moment. Thank you for reviewing my work so long ago.
| Cloud Burst 3/5/05 . chapter 1
i like the old language uve added in, and this was very powerful and intense
| Stormie Greye 2/17/05 . chapter 1
Strong and powerful poem to convey a deep and emotional message. Great poem. I really liked this.
| M.T. Stockton 2/14/05 . chapter 1
Enjoyable... You manage to convey your emotions very nicely. However, I found that the flow was at times not quite as smooth as it could be with a little tweaking of the rhythm. Mind you, I have nothing against a more syncopated or unconventional kind of beat, but whatever the style, rhythm is crucial to the overall quality of the piece. I also agree with another reviewer - the word "amiss" seems rather out of place in that sentence. Abyss, maybe? Other than those two points, this was a nice work, showing a great ability to capture emotions and put them into words. Keep writing! :o)
BTW, thanks for the review!
| Werewolf Nighteyes 2/4/05 . chapter 1
Beautiful poem. It's so sad... I like the way you carry your emotions across. It comes through in such a way that it's easy to get the 'feel' of this poem and feel that way too. Keep it up!
| bobbilicious 2/4/05 . chapter 1
Very good poetry. I'd love to know what inspired you to write this. Thank you for the R&R as well. _
| Laura Barton 2/1/05 . chapter 1
It was good, but I question the final two lines.
'Just because you never understood But then again, you never could'
Isn't that saying the same thing? I don't know really how to explain what I mean, but it sounds weird to me. When I take a few minutes to think about it, I become aware of what you are intending to say, but upon first glance it was confusing. Also, 'eyes of thine' sounds a bit strange as well. I was aware as to what thine meant before hand, but I guess I've just never heard it used in such a fashion.
'Don't relinquish me to the amiss'
Now, what I get from that (from the definitions of relinquish and amiss) is this sentence: Don't give up me to the wrong/wrongly/bad/badly. Somehow, that also doesn't seem correct. I know, I probably sound so picky right now, but this is just how I am perceiving this poem. T'is all from me.
| dustytiger 1/30/05 . chapter 1
wow, what a great peice, very powerful, keep up the good work
| the.pink.life 1/30/05 . chapter 1
That's such a poetic word (thine). Anyhoo, nice poem.