Wow...simply...amazing.

I really enjoyed this one. I really wish that in a way, you could almost write your novel in this style. I find the novel over descriptive. Like I said, you focus too much on describing the things that go on, that you almost lose the purpose.

This is perfect. You have to edit it, fix the spelling and grammar. This is a peice worthy of your perfecting. I enjoyed the style. I enjoyed the contrast, although the transition was a bit muzzy, a bit confusing.

The best thing I've read from you so far, but thats not much yet. (soon to change)

Keep it Wild, bro.-Ace

I enjoyed it a lot.