Hm, interesting, the General's daughter...well, I wonder how she is going to be punished if she's someone important. Short, but good anyway. Hope you update it soon:)

Nice beginning, the description in this is very good, and when the flower floats by and they're in the boat, and then see the woman in the crimson, it gives it kind of a mystic feeling. I wasn't sure why "bloody savage" was underlined as a though, maybe in italics, since that's whats usually done. The background was nice too, like the soldiers being dragged so shave off their hair, gives a lot of flavor to the world, fleshes it out. Nice job

Okey dokey, this is good, first off. Lol it's well written with the detailed descriptions and accurate grammar. Go you!

There are a lot of names of places and people and tribes mentioned in this first chapter, and the only SLIGHT problem I have with that is remembering what they're all for. Perhaps save some of the explanations for later so as to allow one to take it all in more easily?

Thanks for your reviews!! THEM and The Storm have been updated!

Wee... that was, well it was simple. You have created a simple confrontation - through words and truces and whatnot. Great approach to describing the woman's hair.

Now get to work on the other section!

I totally dug the ritual and process of approaching the island. It took a bit of time to finally get their and I didn't know right off the bat that Thehad and Zhami were in a boat to begin with.

Great organization, a little bit more description would have been nice, but you did describe the morning, day and island all in great sequence. See ya at Two.

pretty good stuff. ill keep reading.

Lol, spine-tingling! The General's daughter! I see something big looming up for this story...they're not gonna achieve peace, are they?

Did I mention that Castler is an awesome name?

Gripping scene! (I feel like I reviewed this already but I guess not.) This gets more interesting, I'd like to see more if you ever have time!

And as for the author of "Letter to a Fiancé," it's me. It's not from a character of anything, it's me to my real-life soon-to-be husband. :) It's actually too impersonal for my taste but it works in a prose-poetry sort of way.

~ Ceara Brede (who thinks that LP is much more popular than she is, I have ubermore reviews on that account - but then my better writing is there...)

The setting of this chapter does more for it than anything else. Definitely a fresh breath in the stagnant face of conventional FP fantasy.

Interesting! My question: The Amazons are Asian and the Castlers are African? (Representatively?) Cuz Amazons are South American, but you'd know that, so I'm a little confused here. And what's with the year? :-D So many questions, so few answers!

Oh! And I haven't visited in a while- what happened to your old stuff?!?! O.o