Ooh. This puts my stories to shame.

I don't have the time to read this whole story at the moment - I only skimmed the first chapter - but you are a rarity on FictionPress, from what I can see! Flowing sentences, powerfully descriptive paragraphs, interesting characters... I'm putting this on my Favorites and coming back to read it later. Keep writing :)

Whoa! Quite a revelation here! The father's apparently sleazer than I first thought. He seems like Charlie Wilson meets Al Capone. However, it seems there's more to Hadrian's background than that revelation at the end. Thanks for updating! Nice to see you're still doing this story!

A nice, dark chapter. Looks like you've certainly put the main characters in a bad place here. The father's really acting like a scum bag. The whole thing, though, recks of conspiracy of sorts...

I see this story's been updated. I've been hoping you'd continue this enjoyable story. I see this chapter, though, you've fleshed out the father figure a bit. Talk about absolute power corrupting absolutely. He reminds me a bit of Senator Rourke in Sin City. I did like the irony of having the 'daughter create the evil father,' and it seems Daddy Dearest is using the daughter as an excuse for political power grabbing.

Crazy chapter, really good, i love the way her dad just happened to walk back into her life. I hope she kills the evil little S.O.B. or atleast have Hadrian do it, that would be nice. So anyhoo, i hope you write more soon, can't wait to read and review. Now i must flee on my donkey (oh great he's leaving without me), got to fly, Bye bye.

This story is crazy, wow. I've almost completely fallen in love with Hadrian and your description is awsome. I really do love it...so update soon or may be forced to do something we will both regret like beat you with a starving cat in a sack. Or a Gremiln in a barrel. (like i said the first time every one tells me that i'm not quite all in order up there if you get my drift) Update soon (like in the next five mins lol) bye bye.

Hello there fellow kinkajou, yes yes i'm quite insane. Anyhow, i just wanted to say this story is absolutly fantastic, i love it to little tiny bits and i hope to read more soon now since i have only reached chapter 2 (this is the outcome of having siblings, you don't get loads of computer time to go fic shopping)...anyhoo, i'm guessing that isabel represents the angel on the watch unless i am mistaken. And now i must flee on my donkey (dash and blow). I sall returne. Bye bye now.

i've only read 1/2 way thru, but i like it already. it's dark and mysterious, which draws me to it, keep doing what you're doing.

I see you've revised the chapter. Isabel's father, the Senator, seems like he'll have an important role to play later on. You've done a nice short scene showing Walter's villainous traits. Certainly a bit of a change with Hadrian and Isabel. Looking forward to see where that ends up.

Alright, finished reading this. Expect a detailed review emailed to you soon.

Finally, a look at who Hadrian is. It's so interesting. I'm hooked to this story. I'm bad at keeping up on reviewing so, yeah. Anyway, I hope to see the next chapter soon!

YOur detail is excellent. Everything so far has been well written and well executed. You have presented a great character. And overall, this has begun as a good story. Update soon! Oh yes, and if you don't mind, please review my story.

i think this is really good and you have constructed the story to fit in events and character development well. Your dialogue and internal dialogue is revealing and shows the reader exactly what they need to know. chilling car crash, realistic without going over the topwill