|Reviews for Left Behind Because|
| Aella88 5/29/05 . chapter 1
I love it. I plan to read the rest of your works too, but it may take me a while. You might like some of my works. I only have a few posted here, but I am working on getting the rest up. One of my stories is based on a poem that I also have here, and the other two stories are mainly about fairies. What can I say, I love them. Also, if It is possible, could I get your email so I can talk to you in depth about your work? If I can, just put it in a review for one of my works. Also, let me know if you want my email.
| Wtf is This Shit 2/1/05 . chapter 1
Very nice. Just a few mistakes:
"I thought you care[d]."
"You left and are gone." It is pointless to say 'and are gone', because that is what leaving means.
"I sitthere remembering us;" (Two words are clumped together.)
"I never gave out a fuss..." (Perhaps you could change it to 'made a fuss'?)
"But hten, you didn't like "we"." (Spelling mistake!)
"I just wanted to kiss [you]..."
"How could I be such a fool?" (I hate it when poeple use "?" in a poem! It just ruins it! I understand it's an emotional sentence, but it's just not very pretty. We can feel the emoton without an extra question mark.)
Anyways, it was an excellent poem. I really enjoyed it, and it wasn't just about being dumped by a boy, and crying your eyes out. You give reasons, that make us feel more atached to the heroine. However, I think you need to add a few more clues to show that she has cancer, or whatever her illness is. I enjoyed your poem! Please take a look at some of my poems!
| The Sleepy Poet 2/1/05 . chapter 1
I remember you writing this poem. This is the poem that inspired 'Princess True' Awesome.