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| Manuel Fajar 2005-02-21 ch 1,  | abuseinto a firewalk i was drawn, unknowing that gray ashes deep, protected pink soft feet from heat, but such is faerie power of Faith, that when Belief creates its wish, it flies over volcanoes hot, that otherwise would sear fair skin, and blister all heart's hopeful dreams. |
| Luneko 2005-02-12 ch 1, | abuseWow. *big eyes of wonderment* I stand in awe of your writing skill. Such deftness of phrase and precise word choice... I - just... Wow.Well I know the feeling, but I could never do it justice. You certainly have been given a gift. Use it well. |
| Hershey249 2005-02-06 ch 1, | abuseGood Lord. (no pun intended. ^_^()) The rhyme scheme. GAH! I WANT that rhyme scheme. One of the hardest things to do with poetry in create an original rhyming pattern. You have my utmost admiration just for that. I can completely understand everything written here. Eloquent. That's the first word that comes to mind. "Delicate touches and violent thrashes / powerful strokes of passionate art." Those two lines are probably the ones that speak to me most. This is life, this is the unknown, and we look up at the sky and feel that this is someone up there, too. Turbulent and still...life is feeling contradictory emotions, and God's in the picture somewhere in there...very, very insightful and cool. Wow. Beautiful. *ceases stammering* |
| Galadh Niniel 2005-02-03 ch 1, | abuseWow - that was just ... stunning. The images are very dense and complicated, but that fits the subject amtter perfectly, brings across that intensity and mystery beyond comprehension that we associate with God. Wonderful also the intensity of your faith, your longing for his touch. I wish I could feel like that again, instead of being caught and trapped in unhappy earthly love ... |
| Crazy In 88 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuseGood poem- makes me feel quilty for um- not- feeling that- though i call myself a Christian- I'm "backslidden" , as it's often called. If you could return the review, that would be nice.-Yin |
| Crazy Biene 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuseI love this...do u mind if I use the theme or feeling this brings for a chappie in my story? THANXX |
| poetic abortion 2005-02-01 ch 1, | abuseSo very beautiful. ^_^ I love this. So emotional and angst ridden. ( I REALLY shouldn't say this. @__@ ) ~* Noelle *~ |
| simpleplan13 2005-02-01 ch 1, | abusewow.. teh word choices were amazing.. the poem was so powerful.. amazing job |
| cookiemonster 2005-02-01 ch 1, | abuse*blink* wow, that was very descriptive. It was a little dificult for me to resd, because big words usually dont like me, but I guess that all supported the emotion well. I liked it! Henna |