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| breezy nostrils 2005-08-21 ch 1,  | abuseI was overwhelmed with your vocabulary...but it made the poem definitely more colourful, nice description, and keep up the good work! |
| xxLuvoxx 2005-06-06 ch 1, | abuseI truly loved this one because I feel the same way. It is such a shame for people who cannot stare up at the stars like the birds do. |
| catseyeview 2005-04-27 ch 1, | abuseWow, timely topics, nice again! |
| myno 2005-03-11 ch 1, | abusebeautiful piece of writing- I live out in the country at the moment, and really appreciate the number of stars I can see on a clear night, as well as the sunrises- the beauties of nature that we destroy with our big cities. Well expressed poem. |
| Cyssel 2005-03-07 ch 1, | abuseWonderful. Pure magic of the moment. Loved the words you used, e.g. "howling wind of grief", "webs of destiny's vast veiling", just to name a few. |
| Lateraina Wolf 2005-02-17 ch 1, | abuseI've always been fascinated with stars, and you're right. People don't listen to what they call us "tree huggers," and soon I hope they'll learn. But I hope that I'll be able to see them clearly in twenty years. Very good poem! |
| Arrow's Flight 2005-02-07 ch 1, | abuseReally Intriguing. I like the lines that seperate the stanzas, they actually add to the poem. The style is thoughtful as well as thought-provoking and it has a nice flow. Thank you for reviewing! -Arrow's Flight- |
| Steel Winged Angel 2005-02-07 ch 1, | abuseaw wow! This is absoulutely beautiful, no lie. Your words are amazing. And the note at the end touched me deeply, since I love stars as well. Thanks for reviewing btw!~Hawke |
| DobbyGrl 2005-02-07 ch 1, | abuseReally Super Good AWEsome poem! I love the way you wrote it! GREAT Job! |
| cosmo-queen 2005-02-03 ch 1, | abuseThis is absolutely goregous and it is a matter which is close to my heart too, because where I live, there are simply not enough visible stars. I remember going to the countryside though, where there are hardly any street-lights and far less pollution. The whole sky was filled with stars and the mist of the Milky Way, it truly felt as if I was sharing a moment with the universe. Ahh. Such pretty and inspiring memories. Sorry, I'm babbling :) I must add, I loved the lines "Halcyon eyes gaze at the astral thief/Hissing on lustrous cement shores." Great work :) *cosmo-queen* |
| keltica 2005-02-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseThanks to everyone, I wrote this poem in 5 minutes yesterday evening so it will require some revision, but I had this feeling inside that I cannot stand artificial light and the nights are colder because the stars are no longer there. They seem to shrink as man's hegemony on light grows and all we had is lost. Greetingskeltica http://keltica.proboards40.com |
| Andaren 2005-02-03 ch 1, | abuseHow I wish I could see the stars again :( Blessed Be, Andaren x |
| smile persephone 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuseSo very true. Stars are amazing wonders. This makes me think about things a bit more. It also makes me want to go out and gaze at the stars tonight. Ah, inspiration! Lovely poem. |
| GypsyMothra 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuse"What are we men but haughty threads/In the webs of destiny’s vast veiling?"Love that line. Brilliant poem. I love the language you used. I miss the stars now . . . |
| florida 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuseI like it. And I totaly agree about ur dedication to the stars thing. The people of our generation needs to learn to love and respect the stars agian. |