o0o. interesting. i always did like villains with an overblown sense of their own power and ability to get more...

:) CD

This chapter was way better than the first one- it was a lot more coherant, a lot less confusing, and you really gave the reader a chance to get to know the charecters better. Good job.

who is who? which is which? try using page breaks for POV changes. it's confusing trying to figure out what time it is and where the main character is.

otherwise, good story.

:) CD

interesting. very interesting...

thanks for reviewing Zeda, btw. and yes, i'm working on the sequel. I know Zeda was shorter than my usual, so i'm trying to work as quickly as possible.

good story so far.

:) CD

I like how he's so legendary, yet mysterious. Good start, but long chapter. Maybe shorten it a bit- usually it's easier to attract readers with shorter chapters.

Hey Shogun Lodge. This is looking to be a very interesting story indeed.

It seems to still be set in Feudal Japan, and yet nobody thinks anything of his sunglasses. You should fix that if it still is Feudal Japan.

Also, is Shogun Lodge human in this story?

And one final thing. Lay off the Zatoichi a bit okay?