i liked this poem alot. you have some nice rhyme:) thank you for reviewin my story :) j x

Thanks for reviewing my story, I thought something seemed off about it. You hit the nail on the poem. I like this line-"Kicking and screaming or calm/Death will have it's day."The only thing is, when "its" is possesive, there's no apostraphe. It should read, "Death will have its day." The same goes for "And we fall within its void."

Nice writing. I like it