PWNT! OMG LOVED IT! HOPEYOU MAKE A NEW ONE

Nice first chapter! I like the story a lot so far, I'll keep reading later and I'll try to review every chapter.Nice job!Bye!Meow!

Nice story so far. I love how you describe things. Can't wait for the next chapter

I like this chapter as well as your first. Nice work on the detail and I only saw three spelling errors. Other then that it was great!

This was excellent and full of details. I loved how you used (i cant think of the actual word, what can i say its summer?)words like BOM or CRASH! Anyway, it was good. Also when you have the time, can you read my story "Disappointed Life." (it's a background of a character in the story on here called Dragon Raiders [a story my friends and I made up ]) Good Job!

This story interests me, I'll be sure to follow it. I'll finish up the other chapters and give another review.

looks good. cant wait to read on.

You don't have to have the red haired guy return. I hate bad guys, unless they turn good then they become cool. Now onto the story, it was good, a little predictable but that's how it is with action stories. If this was to be an anime, it would be very gruesome. Don't you think? There two words that have a "u" that doesn't belong in them. But overall, very good! Only reason why my chapters aren't this long (I usually write this long, if not longer) is because when I actually start drawing out my manga, it wouldn't take too much work to draw out one chapter. That makes sense right? Very good and I'm looking forward to chapter 3! I could help you with anything else if you need.

I like this story. Harsh training for Hiro glad I'm not him. Woah, him turning into berzerker and torturing the villains. Awesome. Later

you know, its kind of weird ur name is Hiro and mines Takehiro, dontcha think?

Clap! Clap! Clap! Excellent job! I can't say it's my favorite, but doesn't remove the fact that it was really good. I discovered a couple of typos but that's nothing really. I could be your editor if you want, but you should read your work over again once you finish it, if you haven't been already. That's when you'll see most mistakes that others would notice. Also, make sure you let the readers know when it's a change of scene and characters or else we'll get confused. Like when those guys were planting the bomb or whatever it was, you didn't put anything to transition to that scene. Just some advice, from someone who has more experience. Also, the American names sort of bug me but that's okay. It's your story and you could do whatever you want with it. I'll edit your chapters if you send it to me in advance. Excellent start!

Hiro is so freakin cool! Update this soon, I can't wait to read about the fight!