The first line seems vague and like it doesn't belong, but that might just be me.
I like the rest of it though.
I really hope you finish it sometime and post it as a full poem! It has so much potential!

~Luna Turner

How am I so attracted to two lines? I have no idea.
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But oh how I love them! There's a lot you could do with these. But What a great idea to put started/unfinished poems on here! I wish I had thought of something like that. I do believe I'm going to read some more. Now I have somewhere to go when I need inspiration. :D

Thank you!

~Luna Turner

Wow this is a really genius idea =) I always just get rid of my unfinished ideas.. I guess if you keep a record of them you could always look back and give them another go XD

Very inspirational too.

I am so thrilled i found this collection of work. I loved these short snippets. It left me wanting more (…so I ended up going back and reading each one again). “I cherish every lie you feed me” from The Lies was my favorite line of all the pieces. Don’t know why exactly at the moment but it struck a cord in me, made me think it over. I’d have to say “Waiting” was also memorable for me. It was abrupt and to the point. The directness of it was oddly heartbreaking.

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Wow, even your unfinished poems are really cool! I don't even like poetry, but there's something so wonderful about yours :D Um, I know this is going to sound weird, but I liked how it was unfinished. I thought it added this sense of mystery, which was fascinating in a way.

I also loved the personification of 'a cool breeze caressing.' You use techniques so well. I see a simile as well. Really good stuff!

this one is beautiful.

Ooh nice.

Aww my gosh this is so short but it's SO beautiful :D favourites!

Plastic smile, nice.

Ah my favourite so far, hehe expect to get a lot of reviews.

Oh I love this one, so pretty!

Ooh I like :P

what fantastic descriptions! i happen to hate cotton candy, but if i liked cotton candy my mouth cold surely be watering right now. nice job

o! i REALLY liked this one. a lot. great

wow. so much is said in so little space. great job. you're like a writing speed demon. you write so MUCH!! kudos to you.