Ha, the last line.. the punch line was perfect!! I thought they'd known each other... but you proved me wrong, "I'm Anna, by the way"... yeah... 'by the way' nice one, dude!
Narq.

You have a beautiful writing style. I love the way how you made this seem oh so serious yet put twists that made me snort with laughter.
Narq.

I love the way you wrote this, by the way. Your writing style is lovely - flows so naturally, and yet you manage to get a real mood without it sounding forced. The images are soo cute yet realistic and imaginable
Narq.

God, this is really good. "I'm Anna, by the way," I said blandly is such a great ending, and it leaves me wanting to know more about her. It's like you tell us so much, but still just teasing us. The line about French is also really funny.

I love drunk people.

This is so funny and adorable! I love kids, and kids "falling in love" the way they do, running around and shouting that the other person likes them... very sweet.

I love your original plots!! No lovey dovy thing- though the seven year old kid romance was hilarious, keep writing!!

Aw, can I just say how adorable Ben is? He makes me wish I had a little brother – instead I have a way-too-wise-for-her-age little sister. And the dead hamster, recently my sisters turtle died (but he was suicidal...so it was really quite expected) but I can strangely relate to the main character. And Anna was so sad and uncomfortably real that it tugged my heart strings (because I’m such a puppet ;]).

There’s such a natural flow to your writing in this, it made it an even more enjoyable read.

‘I wanted to fall in love some day, and you fall in love with people, not kisses.’ That’s one for my quotes booklet. Absolutely true and so right. One of the best lines I’ve read on FP.

Aww. The entire collection of one shots so far have been absolutely adorable. I loved the first one for it's adorableness of Ben and his first true love, connected with second one because i have been given a turtle as a birthday present (my first pet!who has been named dude crush, like all the other million of of turtles were after the release of finding nemo)but i was told it was actually supposed to be 2 turtles but the second one died before he could make it to me...(also was told his grave was the rubbish bin..ouch) and the last one was interesting in how original the idea of a kiss isn't all sparks and "wow im in love with him already" kinda story (yeah im so eloquent).Anyway, i look forward to reading more of these one shots!

i love how the character acts normal and is real (if you know what i mean) her thoughts are actually really cool and they're not filled with air-headed crap...she reminds me of someone i used to know...loll...great stories keep writing.

Since I already reviewed you in the past for kiss chase and dead hamster which I still think is adorable. I just wanted to check out your last story here and see what it was about.

Honestly I think it was funny how you portrayed a well built side of the drunken mind and body when it is conscious but unconscious of what it's doing. That primitive thing is perhaps far too true in what we are, or rather have become. Considering that sex is deeply overrated nowaday.

Oh Yeah, I now understand why you asked that question on writers 101. It was best that you did put it in teen and told everyone why you were rating it teen. Because the graphic desricptions, although mild in comparison to what I have read, they weren't for the rating of K. Which you already knew, but just wasn't sure of, due to the other stories it was joined with.

hm...can't find anything to criticise.

Of course, I take offense to being called primitive.

Very realistic sounding with everything. I like the last line alot too, really sad how stuff like names don't seem to matter.

Well, as always excellent.

-peace out.

I could have sworn I reviewd this once. I know I read it. Well, as always excellent short. Too lazy to read it again so I'll move on to the next one.

Hiya! It's me again! Well, thanks for the review you've sent. It really made my day! ^^ Anyway, these were interesting shorts you've got. The Anna part was a bit pg-rated, but anyway, it still a good chapter. Gives girls something to think about whenever they wanted to get drunk. The first chapter really started things well, but I like the part of the hamster the best. I dunno why, but it really seems funny to me. Like the idea of how freaked out a person can be when his pet died... and yeah btw, what does it mean by Great Toilet of Doom and who is Antony Worrel Thomson? Well, just having those questions out of random. Anyway, update soon! Bye! ^^

This one's more serious than the others, but it's very nicely written. You get the balance between contemplation and action really nice, and move very well between the two.

"I told myself that I liked teen movies and that I needed to loosen up. I needed to make myself fancy him. I needed to make myself like this." Oh, that's uncomfortably real. It's making me squirm.

"Holy **; I’d become a vampire." Congrats! Hehehehe.

"I responded, but accidentally went to the wrong side. It wasn’t embarrassing like in films; it was just something that happened." This made me smile in a 'that was really nicely written and I can totally identify' kinda way. Like a... kindred spirit- I've completely cracked. I'm stopping now.

"I wanted to fall in love some day, and you fall in love with people, not kisses." That was nice too. Made me smile.

"“Pourquoi?” Oh my God, I’d brought out the French. I was far gone." *Dies laughing* Me and my friends do that!! With spanish and russian accents too. It's so funny.

"I didn’t want to be too frigid so I let him continue, despite the fact that I was uncomfortable." *Squirms again*

Genius last line. Awesome.

Okay, if I had to give this a rating, it would probably be a T. I think. Just for this last one. But I do think you have to rate for the content of the whole, just as in a story you would, even if the 'dodgy stuff' (*Giggles*) is only in one chapter.

Very very cool stuff. Keep writing!

~Addictedwriter from youngwriters101

Oh... I want jaffa cakes now...

"It’s nice and warm in here." I love that line. Don't ask me why.

Lovely characters by the way - very vivid for a one shot. Really nicely conveyed.

Can I just say that I LOVE POOKIE? He sounds like the coolest hamster in the world. Apart from the ones I had - Hammie and Bark. (I compensated for lack of imagination on the first, as you can probably tell. I always was an odd child.)

I can so see a Hamster looking like that Thompson guy!! That's h.i.l.a.r.i.o.u.s!!

Cuteness again. You really convey a whole mood really well. Wonderful writing.