I think your idea shows potential and I’d like to see you develop it further. I do agree with another reviewer, that you could certainly do with more detail, for example a bit more on Alisha’s life prior to Raiin showing up, so we know how she has grown and felt up to now in her life. I don’t have a clear image of what Aeatherspace and Physeospace are like either, are they like modern day? A fantasy world? So I’d like to hear a bit more about that, perhaps on your introductory ‘default’ chapter. I got a little confused on the default chapter as you throw a lot of information at once to us, it might be an idea to leave bits out that are not necessary to know straight away and add them into your story later and focus on telling the general history there (like the stuff about the sorcerer and Alisha’s parents etc) and building us a picture of what aetherspace is like in clear detail. Know what I mean?The characters are interesting, the ‘guardian’ dragons strike me as being quite cute, and chapter three leaves me wondering how they will journey to aetherspace and what adventure awaits them. Some intriguing ideas there ~

Very well thought out i felt although it could do with more little details about the places there in and live. other than that a very gd story and i cant wait for the rest

Awesome, but I have noticed one thing reading this time around. Probably because I've learned a few new things myself since last.

I don't think you should deliver Alisha's entire past so quickly or so easily. You'd get a better effect if all these details over the course of the next few chapters, maybe even the entire story.

Just a tip, something a teacher taught me haha.

Keep up the good work! :)