o_O; Your classmates are seriously -dense-. o.o; At least, I think so. I don't see how they couldn't understand, or at least make -something- out of it.

Anyway, I like it. It speaks a lot, without speaking too much, you know?

gives me shivers, i think you are one of the best dialog writers i know. who is the other girl eh? i can't understand the feeling, but the way you write it make me understand the emotions, if that makes any sense at all. keep up the good work my friend.

That's really good... the story, not... well, you know what i mean...

I always like reading stories like this... I don't know why... my father was mentally abusive... it really sucks...

Interesting, yet spooky, in a sad, deranged sort of way. I like the comparison of the cold, dead metal of the monkey bars to emotions; often I think in comparisons like that.I'm not sure what the point of the work is, but seeing as how you only had fifteen minutes to write it was pretty good.

I'd like to see this developed more:) Good start.