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| Alex 2005-08-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseI *loved* the opening stanza. but. for some reason, i didn't like the second. I don't think it's the writing style, just that you go from loving her, to worshipping her. and maybe that's the effect you were looking for. but it seemed to harsh. ended too bluntly. but. "These feelings run deeper than affection." GREAT opening line. |
| Cicy Chan 2005-02-04 ch 1,  | abusea nice little sweet poem... good job! |
| Aftyn 2005-02-04 ch 1, anon. | abuse:) this one is extreamlly beautiful too...like really, you write the most amazing poems about love...I have a hard time doing that. YOU, you are perfect. |