Wow. This was...scary. But really good, and original. And I agree with what you said on your author page--original is definitely overrated. =)

Wonderful story: you're a phenomenal author. Great job!

-LInnet

*shivers* you know how I feel about this one. Creeps me out and at the same time it's so damn good!

I like it how the parents eat toast... it emphasizes their blandness.

You went back through (or maybe you put this up before the corrections) and changed all the capitalized Mothers and Fathers to lowercased. umm... remember that when Mother or Father is used as a name (as in "he decided it would be possible, as Mother's hair was puffed up higher than Father's.") it should be capitalized.

Other than that, well done. Gives me the chills every time I read it.

Always,

KMJ

E, it is kinda creepy. The whole thing is surreal, even the "normal" stuff, you do a good job of making everything have a wierd feel to it. My only suggestion is that you repeat the phrase "there was reason to be afraid now" a little too often, it was a little redundant. But, overall, I liked it.