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| Zhyghar Zhyll 2006-01-21 ch 1,   | I don't usually care much for this style of poem but this one shows promise. One questionable line stood out - "Father don't leave me." If God were in fact Father, (s)he wouldn't be there. Maybe this could be brought out? Such as. "Father ... / "You're not my Father? / He's my Father? / Oh God don't leave me..." |
| DarthVenom1 2005-04-06 ch 1, | Heya, it's Corey from your careers class ^^ Found your account name and thought I'd say hi. Anyway, this piece is very moving, for me especially because I've always been deeply interested in this sort of thing. |
| Andrew(BuffAndy 2005-03-16 ch 1, | very very good. keep it up! |
| Ty 2005-02-21 ch 1, | wow ji remember you writing this after craig&bre...deeply moving and heart touching |
| Corzey 2005-02-13 ch 1, | hey! i like this one too |
| ta1nt3d1uv 2005-02-06 ch 1, | hey nice, i like it. |
| Agony of Mind 2005-02-06 ch 1, | *sniffles* Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. I don't know what else to say. I've thought about this many times. Although, I know I am saved, I still sometimes wonder if I am tricking myself and am not truly saved, but I time and time again God has shown me, through the promise in His word, that I am saved. Again, wonderful poem.Sarah |
| dustytiger 2005-02-05 ch 1, | great job on this, so powerful, thank you for sharing |