...And this one is a lot like cummings! I appreciate that you did not let form and structure straightjacket your message. Kudos.

wow you wrote this very well. i like your phrasing and the tone of this poem. great job.(note: i use great job only on the ones i think are really good and you're getting a lot of them.)

loved this, and the descriptions.

That was amazing! The first four lines were perfectly expressed and reminded me of cummings. Your vocabulary and imagery was sublime. I really liked the colors you associated with because you seemed to be concentrating on greens and reds, which remind me of traffic lights, which fits the whole theme brilliantly. GREAT job. This is one of my favorites.

beautiful rhyming and the imagery is just breath taking. i love this.

"But the lights were just asphalt-veiled gems

On the freeway of impossibles and dreams and desires."

God, I love it. There's something so intriguing about the whole poem.

No matter how much I read this, it never gets old or tiresome. It's as sweet and as tender and as crisp as it was the first time I read it. I love it. I love your stuff and you of course! :D and I'm so glad other people are acknowledging your godliness.

Oh, wow. I love the style, and I love the story.

Kinda reminds me of Pleasantville. I don't know why.

I like the descriptions. Awesome!