i like this story a lot. you write very well! i wish the chapters were longer..for example, you could easily combine chapters 2 and 3, or even 3 and 4. i thought it was odd how reina automatically trusted Kaie but i like that character so i'll forgive her :) good job!

This is good. I can't say I approve of short chapters, but that doesn't mean their content isn't good. Your intro was excellent, following the wind as it did. It's so important to have a somewhat inchanting beginning such as yours. Without it, I would never have read even one more chapter.Oh, on a side note, in chapter nine, Reina faded gradually into consciousness, not "Reina faded into consciousness gradually". Keep writing!

I like your writing style, and I will be back when you update.

Again, good desriptions that don't overpower you, but give enough information to be satisfied with.

"and near it a hallways" doesn't make sense. Should it be 'and near it a hallway' or 'and near it hallways' or something?

I liked the descriptions in the first paragraph, and how this chapter ended.

I liked the end line. Actually I liked all of it. One thing, write numbers in their word format, sorry, it really annoys me when people don't do that. Anyway a good prologue.

sorry i got kinda confused with this chapter. . .did she tell them that she was a rebel? anyways, i really like the grandmother's character!

your welcome. ^.^ anyways, this is getting interesting. Your writing style is cool!

its a good start, very intruiging. .lol i don't think i spelt that write. Keep going and thanx for the review! ^.^