Wow! The detail in your third chapter is really good! Sorry I haven't emailed you, but I just don't have the time... I have a term paper due in 3 days! Wah!

Must say I rather enjoy this. :)

So far I like your story. You have a good plot line, but it's not very descriptive. It's like you know what the characters look like, so you expect us to know as well. Try adding a little more depth to the characters. Instead of just stating that K'liah and Kathand'r became sisters, show us how. Describe their outfits, and show more physical descriptions, as well as mental ones. All and all, good job so far, and I'm looking forward to reading more of this!PS. If you want to, I just started my first story on fictionpress.com. Come check it out and tell me how I've done!

Hey, just wanted to let you know I am reading your stuff here. Still good, I'm glad to say.

Nice. Nice. Nice. Good work ^_^