Now, know this about me: as a general rule, I HATE first person writing. However, this was good. Whiel reading it I caught the feeling of a person who feels defeated (in other words, you accurately portrayed the emotion of your character). Thanks again for reviewing my stories, and know that, again, they're very, very, VERY old versions.

Interesting. I love that last stanza.

I like it! Great imagry used! The rhyming was great which gave it a real nice flow! Well done!

Wow!! That's really good. Nice job.