i liked the story, until the last chapter. you condensed everything too much and it was way too abrupt. how did josh know lucy? and then it just ends? saying she had learned the hard way is not a good end to the story. you need some kind of resolution.

Oh my god. This is ending? Oh poor Rose. How does Josh end up sleep with Lucy? That's strange. Anyway, I wonder why Rose push Josh away because of her friend's child. Why can't Josh should support Lucy and her child? Hurry update soon.

Phantom of the Opera is one of the best shows ever made. Yep, it's a fact. Somehow, though, I've never yet managed to feel sorry for the phantom.

Okay, quick little review. You're condensing the entire storyline. You could spread out the first and second parts of the story. I don't think the American is really going to just give her up so easily. And start at the beginning, where her father first leaves her life, and bring the emotion into that. And you could quite easily spread out the ending parts, 'cause you're telling us that she's getting along okay, but you're not showing it to us. And, the characters are a little flat. Rose is developed, but the American is flat, the readers know next to nothing of the father's character, and the mother (Lucy?) is also a bit more developed, but there is always the possibility to rounding them out more.

Hey. You finally update now. So Rose and her father started to have talk. Interesting. Sound alike she take over to care for him. I wonder what Josh is up to now? Poor Lucy. I hope she will be ok by herself. Hurry update soon.

Hey!Oh my god, Lucy is pregnant. Who's father? Oh hold a moment, five more chapters than finish? Why? Oh ok, that ur decision. Why does Rose agree to date with Josh? Hurry update soon.

josh. does not. deserve. to. live.

i don't know why. he just doesn't.

dan, my man, you called her christine.

“Christine, pay attention!” Someone whispered in her ear, bringing her back to her senses.

Lucy was giving her a pointed look, causing Rose to sigh and turn her attention back to the lecture she was sitting though.

i'm assuming that was accidental?

josh bugs me. he needs to get like...run over by a car or something.

Hey! Wow! Why does Rose left the club coz she's angry? Poor Josh. He must be shocked and sad when he see that she left. Hurry update soon.

Wow! Josh ask Rose to be his date to make his ex-gf jealous. Poor Rose. Why does Josh is interested in Rose? Poor Josh, must be hurt what she say. I wonder if there will be romance between them - but sound like they won't get along very well. Hurry update soon.

hey,lol that charmed mix-up was quite funny to say the truth... i was like piper??

anyhow --thanx for the update-i got to read two chapters- i like the way he's always soo shocked that she doesnt LOVE him already!

Cool chapter, that Josh guy sounds really dodgy.

I'm not exactly a pigeon fan, they just walk funny, lol. I wasn't the one who naked the pigeon that eats the seeds from the bired feeder Fat Boab - my brother's idea, I swear!

I'd beta for you but I'd be crap, lol.

good Chapter!

i am confused. how did this turn into a story about the Charmed ones? i love Charmed a lot but reading this after seeing the series finale and when this is supposed to be a different story it's a bit strange. you must have uploaded the wrong chapter, a chapter that belongs on fanfiction. anyway the first two chapters are awesome and i hope you get the real chapter 3 up soon

How'd this turn into a Charmed chapter? It was fine when I read it yesterday!

Ok, I just want to tell you that you posted a chapter for a Charmed story on this. Just wanted to let you know just in case you didn't realize it.