WHOA! Talk about a SWING of emotions! The beginning made me so comforted, thinking of a sweet summer day watching a little league game, then so sad for Derrick, understanding his pain. My heart swelled when he was concerned that he may have hurt the gopher...then BAM...horrific & strange feelings surrounded me as the story progressed! The powerful last line that closed the story was AMAZING! Great job!

Now that is what I call wicked. Sounds like something Bruce Coville would write. Splendid!!

very well written. Well worded, and creates a nice atmosphere. I have a suggestion though, it would be even more better if it was more fomatted. U know what I mean? Like more space, and maybe a bit more dialogue. Maybe u did it on purpose, but I was just suggesting. well done, though^^

So freaky...but suspenseful, atmospheric, well written, eye-widening...all in all, terrific writing!