This is very... geeze, sometimes I'm just speechless. In this case, it's a good thing. It's... moving... and I love the last lines:

It isn’t a dream.

It is real.

…I can’t breathe.

It's... interesting. And very good. Not BUT very good, but AND very good.

I like it. I've never really felt like this about anybody... at least not that I can remember. But then again, I'm a bit weird when it comes to relationships. :)

I especially like the bit about breathing, dreaming and then... seeing. Seeing that breathing without him or her isn't natural. It's kind of a romantic view of it. I'm a romantic but I think I'm so much of one that I've never quite been able to give my heart away so completely that I can't stand the thought of living without them.

But I don't really mean that... I mean, I can't really say what I mean. *laughs* Nevermind.

Anyway, I really like this. It's cool.

Thats cool, I like the wording in the second stanza, yet is a little sad. Oh well! Its cool anyways! SHAZAAM!

Hi, Jess. Obviously I'm already back. Another fine piece of work by you that makes me think. I can't help but wonder if this was written after a break up between two people you knew, perhaps the cousin you spoke of.Losing someone can make you feel this way especially if you never saw it coming. Keep up your fine work.

I can see why you think it's "loose". There doesn't seem to be any apparent structure to this, but then again, whoever said that structure is a necessity in poetry is a fool. Very meaningful and symbolic.

Favourite part:

"Breathing without you isn't natural.

It isn't a dream.

It is real.

...I can't breathe."

Just so... romantic ^^ Keep churning out the wonderfulness!

This is sweet...mysterious and touching...I loved it. Keep up the wonderful work.

~Shuffle Queen~