Oh this sounds good.
I'm gonna have to read the rest later tho.
Lee

Great, positively amazing. I loved reading every chapter, sentence, and word of this great story. Great plot and good ending. I'm always a sucker for happy endings. Of course, Keaha died, but her daughter livied and Ayden lived...

But now I'm rambling. Well, wonderful story and you know, if you REALLY wanted this could have a sequel? Eh, eh?

I loved it!

sorry for the late review. But hell I'm speechless...I've already expressed myself in previous reviews so uh all I can say is it was one helluva ride and oh yeah good luck in the future.

I've been meaning to get around to reviewing. I liked the story, and I'm glad you fast-forwarded in the last chapter so we could see how the kids turned out! I was really sad that Keaha died, although not really surprised once I thought about it. Yes, post another story.

woah that was so sad...and I'm glad it was because other writers just don't want to kill certain characters. good job! The thing that realy threw me off is how simply Ayden killed Zachari and Gethin...rather stupid if you ask me.I expecteda full on battle. Aren't Zachari and Gethin supposed to be strong? It shouldn't have been that easy. Poor Keaha...I wonder how the few remaining chapters will be like...I really thought it wouldn't end this way.

Another great story. It's nice that Saidi takes after both of her parents. I really think you should do a sequel to this. I know you say that Saidi and Dash succeed with their task but I would like to read about what they do to make a difference. I can't wait for your next story to come up. Great work.

S.S. Dailey

I demand a sequel. COME ON! this ending SCREAMS "sequel!" *puppy begging-eyes* pleease?

Over and out,

:D CD

Reasonably happy ending, yes. You still killed Keaha, but... :P It would be cool if you did a sequel or something about Dash and Saidi restoring justice!

**. That absolutely sucks.

the happenings, not the chapter.

:( CD

I've started to get used to at least one of your main characters dying by the end of the story. I hate to say that it is actually becoming predictable. Yet even though it is predictable I can't help but cry about it. This is the first story where there is actually a family. I hate that Keaha is dead. I don't want this story to end though. I fall in love with your characters and I just want to keep reading about them. Keep it up.

S.S. Dailey

Darn it! You really did kill her! How could you? Evil nasty person. You made me cry! :'( Is there any way she can come back to life? :D No? I didn't think so. Nonetheless, despite you killing Keaha (ahem) this is still really good.

Aw... this is so sad!! I hope Keaha's alright!! Ayden can't give up so soon!! Anyway.. great chapters!!

FRICK!! NOO!! why.

*is speechless...*

:( CD

Yay, another chapter! I've got a bad feeling about this meeting, it sounds too much like a trap to me. But they seriously do need some help. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter. It would be cool if you wrote a sequel to this story when you've finished it, about Saidi. . I'd love to see how Ayden and Keaha try to deal with a kid who would probably be as stubborn as they are.

aw...its going to end? so soon? I thought it would take at least twenty more chapters for it to end...with all the journeys and all...anyways nice installment, I loved it. Guess Keaha's back to square one with Ayden huh? oh well...