The last two lines were amazing... it really wrapped it up! Nothing to correct... everything was a great read!

Nice. I already like this character.

very dark and well...dark. but it's good though.

Wow...it's really good. You captured the moment and the essence of the warrior well. ^_^ And thanks for your advice, I'll improve on my next chapter. But I really can't say anything that you need to improve on here. AAOTD

wow! what a story! great work, keep it up, thank you for the review