Just keeps getting better. Keep it up.

Sounds really good so far. Great detail, short chapters. I come baring one comment/suggestion, paragraphs. Everytime someone new speaks it should be a new paragraph, but then that's my opionon, but it is great all the same.

Good imagery, nice detail with the characters, especially this early in the story. Intriguing ending for the chapters, can't wait to read more. Great job.