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Reviews For: Apocalypse

jrsparkus 2008-08-27 ch 1,	the essence of death, disiesed by the many falls of man, swim in your poem like a hungry shark, devouring everything know to live, love, and breath. i love it; keep on wriing!
James 2007-10-08 ch 1,	THIS IS BEOYND FANTASTIC. ITS MAGICAL WITH A HINT OF ORGASMIC SOUNDING ANAMOLIES> TERRIFIC WORK
anonamous 2007-10-01 ch 1,	It's very yonic. Nice use of the word "nary," too.
kippinator 2006-01-03 ch 1,	I know the feeling you're trying to create here - that there's nothing there and nowhere to go, and everywhere to go at the same time, and everything is just so incomprehensible that you don't know what to try first. This is really good, and it definitely conveys the mood, but you’re right – the rhythm is a little funny. Maybe try getting rid of the ‘and’ at the beginning of lines five and seven and see how that works.
Pheobe Meryll 2005-08-21 ch 1,	I really like the rhythm of this piece; I thought it was smooth and flowing. Your rhymes are unforced, and your words are simple and still, like your theme. A very enjoyable poem.
Triden 2005-08-19 ch 1,	interesting... i no the and is probably a style thing, but for the 'and they aren't anymore' i don't think that really worked. i'm sorry if my critique sounded mean!
Islandbreeze 2005-06-22 ch 1,	beautiful poem, lovely images. I think the rhyming works really well with this sort of poem, couplets might be too, uh, 'cutesy' for this. I love the line about the light stripping the untruth.
lozfairy 2005-02-10 ch 1,	This is so beautiful...especially the last lines 'There they are and yet not as they stare at time’s waves Untouched and alone on the shore.' This poem really stands out and I just wish I could put it on my fave's list but its full :( Anyway, beautiful, creative writing. Lozfairy x
Frank the Turkey 2005-02-09 ch 1,	spooky.

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