This. Was. Absolutely. Amazing. Wow, you are seriously talented. I loved the idea, I loved the entire story. Something did seem like it was missing though. Maybe I'm just tired. I love the mystery of this. Just...wow...

I think the story would have been so much better if you had gone into history behind the old scary house and explained a little more and developed more pesonality to the boys in this, but it's a good storyline and idea.

... I'm so gonna have nightmares now...

Izzy G

Will(,) Drew(,) and Stephen... and we(')re all still here aren’t we...

There are quite a few more minor errors, too many to point out. I think if you re-read this a time or two, you will catch them. Your writing is very good, especially the dialogue. Just put in a little more time editing. Nice work, keep writing.

**Slave**

Great suspense and horror. I like the plot too :)

Wow, that was great. I really enjoyed it, i loved the last line, finished it of very well. Ailinn

In the beginning I was a bit, yeah ok, see this before. In the end I was ready to ** my pants. Really good story, it gave me a good scare. Really like that is started out a bit slow, it made my relax, thinking of when I was a kid that did stupid stuff like saying Bloody Mary to mirrors. Being convinced that I wasn’t going to be scare by the end of this story made the shock all the bigger when it came. COOL =)

Very scary. Bloody Mary always scared me.

The writing itself was pretty good and it was one of the better "non-violent" horror forms of entertainment I have "consumed" within in the last three years or so, but the ending in italics felt a little cliche' some minor spelling erors and stuf but nothing 2 noticable, work on polishing your actual story and you have a really good writing.