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Chibi-Akemi 2005-03-09 . chapter 2
I'm sorry it took me a long time to review but here I am! *poses awaiting cheer then sulks* Well anyways...Congrats on being a nominee and good luck but on to the story at hand! You could try to put a little more detail into who exactly Rosa and the other characters are. All I know is that she can predict stuff OO but all in all the plot is great! Not exactly originalish but one of the best I've seen!
Storm Daughter 2005-02-24 . chapter 2
Its a very nice idea, and it really portrays the essance of coastal life and the connection to the sea. Your writing itself will grow, there is a fair amont of potential there. Perhaps if you read through it you'll see what I mean, and that kind of development only comes with practice and time. Nice job.
Storm Daughter 2005-02-24 . chapter 1
Three things to mention specifically for the prolouge, after establishing that Its too early to judge the valu of the story one way or another. One: "But there is also a graveyard" Well, of course there is a grave yard... wouldn't a fraise like "And there was the graveyard" make more sence? Oh, and one more thing, you would not say "off the Maine mainland" thats a little akward, you would use "off the coast of Maine"
ElvenCrystaline 2005-02-22 . chapter 2
What's going to happen next? :) It's a good starting plot!
eyes of sky 2005-02-11 . chapter 1
i like the idea, but the tv presenter tone grated a little.
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