 Storm Daughter 2005-02-24 . chapter 2Its a very nice idea, and it really portrays the essance of coastal life and the connection to the sea. Your writing itself will grow, there is a fair amont of potential there. Perhaps if you read through it you'll see what I mean, and that kind of development only comes with practice and time. Nice job. |
 Storm Daughter 2005-02-24 . chapter 1Three things to mention specifically for the prolouge, after establishing that Its too early to judge the valu of the story one way or another. One: "But there is also a graveyard" Well, of course there is a grave yard... wouldn't a fraise like "And there was the graveyard" make more sence? Oh, and one more thing, you would not say "off the Maine mainland" thats a little akward, you would use "off the coast of Maine" |