Oh yeah.. this is for the previous post. Why does Kiyo, an exchange student, have a letter jacket?

Anywho... your chapters are way to short. Make them longer. Or else.

good but way too short

its a great story, and it just pulls a person into it! you can really tell a good story!

im very truthful, or tactless. so i'll tell you the bad points in the stor, as weel as the good. please dont take it as a flame

lots of unexplained things. rei is psychic?!? how can it be? as it is only mentioned in passing, it seems like it is only there for the writer's convenience

after the demon thing, it just fast forwards. that was a very important part of the story! i think you maybe should have devoted one more chap to it.

your chaps should be in norm style. that is, not all on one page. its hard to read it, that way.

dont worry, you did write well! keep it up!