I'm loving this more with each bit I read. (and debunking Card at the same time). There's really nothing glaringly wrong or irritating about any of it. The small children spying and not understanding is rather amusing . . . I shall eagerly await your next chapter . . .

. . . slang is wondrous. I'm currently rereading Ender's Game at the moment, and I keep drawing parallels - though I'm finding this to be much more satisfactory. Excellent tone-age, and much love to the empowerment of cookies. This is one of the more unique things I've come across on the site . . . and you have the sense to use grammar! *adore*

I'm incredibly intrigued by this . . . very wonderful, fluid style that is generally lacking on the internet . . . ah, and by the way, To Kill a Child finally has a first chapter . . . and now I'm going to read more of this . . .

This is very interesting and very different from the usual postings I read.

Good Job!! *_*

Oh, I'm liking this. I love the sort of genius kids. It makes you wonder if they are really smart, or if they are normal and all kids could be like this if they needed to be. I love the bit where Ava shushes the other kids. The only thing that didnt' work for me was what the kids saw when they were spying. The conversations the people had seemed exactly the same as conversations people have now adays. I don't know if that's what you were aiming for or what. But I wanted something a little more creative, or taking those well known situations, and putting something unusual and unkown into them, to make it interesting. Just a thought. I really like this though!

I like the idea of them living in the air con, very well described. I also like the way they're developeing a sign language and the 'neggex' thing is very inventive. A nice touch.

Firstly thanks for the review I'm glad you liked it so much. And yes there are places like that, trust me I grew up in them. The middle east, despite what anyone says, is a beautiful place but it is firmly in the past. Saudi Arabia has only been a country for 60/70 years and in that time it's gone from the middle ages to the modern day. That's more then any westerner could do.

Hokay your story, I'm not sure what to make of it because it's not quite done in vague child-hood memories stylie but it's not a very covincing narrative. Basically, you've missed stuff out, simple stuff like description and more of an atmospheric build-up, I think you've done that as part of the style, to make it seem like a kid's memories, if thats the case it doesn't quite work because the things the fact that you've explained what's happening and why it must have happened make it seem adult. And obviously because of the stuff you've missed out it doesn't seem to be compleatly a narrative with an adult looking back on what happened to him as a kid. I have no idea where you're going with the plot idea but the setting is a common one. If you can pull it off good for you.

wow this is awesome! i love all your descriptions. er...ya..0.o. there was one thing that was kinda messed up: "Yes, I was my name was by far the most difficult to write. " i didn't really get that sentance... anyway, update as soon as you can okay? talk to you later!

-kay

wow this is really good. through out the whole story are they going to be little kids? this is interesting, but i like it. :-) keep writing!

-kay

The plot thickens. You've managed to get me hooked. I find myself eagerly looking for details that will help me clue in to what is happening. It's kind of neat to see things from a little kid perspective.Happy writting.Jan

Hi ther, Interesting what kids can do these days. How old is this guy who is writing the story. You make alusions to things being so long ago. Did our hero go into stasis or some such thing? It's kind of nice to know I'm not the only one who has a tendancy to write epics. I've written a few fanfics (hense my pen name) I now have my first original. I've only downloaded 13 chapters yet but I have another 30 odd waiting in the wings.I won't bug you to update but i do wait with keen anticipation.Happy writting.Jan

Ah, c'mon? Just going to leave it off there? ^^ I really like this piece a lot: it's got so much potential, not to mention a great exposition! It really draws you in. Meow. Be sure to add more! *waves fist around threateningly*~*~*Lady Peregrine(Oh, and by the way, thanks for the multitide of reveiws!! I appriciate that in a big way. Like, this big--> _, only, bigger.)