Nice updates. You seem to be a bit loose on spelling, careful, and for bits of thought maybe use the italics instead cause at the moment it looks like speech. Anyway, still good. Keep writing (make your chapters longer) and if possiblecould you R&R my stories, its not a command but itd be nice. Thankx ~*&*~Alvira~*&*~

Good story so far, a little more description would be nice though. Keep going.

This is really good so far. My only suggestion is that you edit it a bit and seperate the speech a bit. Keep on it though :D