i love it

lol, that is true. i like.

Simple and true. At first glance it looks childish, but when you think about it it's really deep. I especially enjoy the "because I love you" part because it's such a change of pace but somehow fits in really nicely. Great work, keep it up!

This was a rather cute moment, and I think we've probably had one of those moments were we wanted to be something else. Personally, I think I would have wanted to be a wolf. Or a bird. That would've been cool. It's true, though, that animals probably don't experience the painful and conflicting emotions of love (because animals have their own wisdom, which mere human beings such as ourselves wouldn't even begin to comprehend). Just everything in this poem was wonderfully conveyed. Nice job.

chibichocobo

I love this, it's so different. I like the structure and the way that one significant line - "because I love you" is so short yet explains so much... keep up the good work and feel free to review me when you have some time. x weasel within x

aw... this is so CUTE! i love this! keep writing!

short, but good, not so sure bout the ending. it was still good.

Very original analogy. I like this.

*lime-girl*

nice. i like the angsty wit. wonderfully written, and i can totally relate. that's one of the reasons i would prefer to be an animal, preferably a bird, than a human. o nice work.

hmn, I wouldn't say this is one of your bests, though, it feels quite ironic...heh, Kuroi-Hoshi-chan, being a fish isn't so good, I'LL END UP EATING YOU! Now, we don't want that, do we? D Haha, well, love the metaphor, hope to see more from ya!

Sumi-chan; What you call love, I call pain.

it wasn't one of your best pieces, but nevertheless I enjoyed reading this, had you used "the fisherman's hook" as a metaphor of "the pain you have to go through". This poem was enjoyable. -ADD

Ha ha! Cute. But your poem carries a profound message, nevertheless: physical pain isn't as much of a concern as emotional pain. Kudos! :)

odd, but awesome.

that last lien is funny but the rest is very thought provoking

Pretty good. I liked this.