Hey, another great beginning.

Time manipulation was always a favorite topic of mine.

I like the way you use imagery, and like I said, you handle dialogues well.

Good job!!

Very interesting. I like it. You should keep writing more. It sounds like a really good story. ^_^ But you may want to read the story over once or twice to check for errors.

Hey kid,I thought I'd reveiw your other story too. I thing it has a lot of potential. It sounds like there is something going on behind the scenes. I hope they let the kid in on it.Enjoy and happy writing.Jan

'Tis a good story so far. It seems to go really fast, maybe you should add more to it; make it a bit longer and fill in the gaps between the main events that occur. It'll make it flow beter. Other than that, it's all looking good! The plot's very catchy.

~sam