I must say that this is a well-written piece of literature and congratulate you for reaching the end of the story!

However, I would like to point out the the ending is too abrupt and the story quite unclear at times.

You could have let the development of Ander's and Crystal's romance be more gradual, and Ander's change in appearance is a little too abrupt as well. You could have spread it out by a few chapters.

But I like the simple way you put the story, and the beginning DID catch my attention. (which is quite a rare thing... I get bored easily. ^^;) So that's good! I think it would be good if you wrote a sequel to this to make up for the abrupt ending. ^^ It could be like a suspense cliff-hanger like that...haha. Just a suggestion. ^^

Right, that's about all I can say about it... again, great story, and I'll be reading!

Have a nice day.

-Tye

Um...you ARE going to wrote some more in this story, right? I thought so. Great job with this! :)

Well, the ending is abrupt, and I am certian that the Wind Demon will be back for Holly.

The remark about the first date was cute. The chanting of the prayers was interesting, I do have to say. I just wonder if such things would do rather nasty things to half demons, but maybe not because they are a free soul to do either good or evil.

Well, Laura was an interesting little sidetrack. Yeah, I can see Ander being putout by the interruption. Bummer, and he was having a good time, too, but they madeup for it. Yes, he definately needs to quit cutting himself. He has everything now.

Well, Crystal is turning out to be a sweet girl, but I think Terri is getting tired of healing Ander everyday. It does help that I now know that Ander is 15. Somehow, I thought he was between 8 and 10, but I couldn't figure out the comments about the crush on Crystal. Oh well. So, does Crystal know about his crush, since she is a seer. Also, do the magic user children have classes that teach them to control their powers?

Any little thing set Ander off to do himself self harm. I don't know if you intend to return to this story or not, but Ander needs to cut himself up a little less often. I am not sure what his stress point was at the beginning of the chapter, and the end of the chapter I would guess he is upset about not being able to talk to Crystal. Maybe a couple of cuts wouldn't be too bad for that one, but he need not shred his whole arm over this one.

Some time ago, I wrote a story that I had the thought about those creatures that were traditional thought evil. If they were not taught by the outside world that they are evil, would they be? My main character of that story made the comment that he was evil, because that was what everyone expected of him. He was an interesting little fellow.

Well, I am glad Ander is settling down to his new situation. Zadai is an older half-demon, eh? I wonder if Ander will meet some half demon his age. I liked that Max told him that his fangs were cool. I am certain that would be a relief to anyone in that sort of situation.

It has been a little while since I have reviewed anything of yours. THis story got highlighted, and it sounded interesting.

Poor little Anders. Strangely enough the place he ended up in reminded me of "Foster's HOme for Imaginery Friends".

I don't quite understand how his recent foster homes did not see that he was unusual. Is he able to disguise himself as human?

Are the other children a little odd looking too. It is strange that Anders doesn't believe that one of them can be of a witch descent. Oh well, to the next chapter, eh.

What a cute story. I definetly felt pressure and suspense when Ander got angry and Crystal was a cute girl for a main character to fall in love with. Definetly well done in it's best moment. On the down side, the kiss was good, but seemed rushed and I really would have liked to see a little bit more on Max and Alex but overall, I would give this story an 8/10. It's best moments though, are the darkest which you did very well. Maybe you could give my story a read and give me some pointers on those "Darker" moments.

The one thing I really didn't like about this one was the words "The End" This is really good and I thing tere should be a second set of adventures with it. What happens? Will they get married? Kids? What happens to Holly? I think the end sucked because it was the end.

Whoa! Absolutely awesome! Great work--you have such description and yet combined with a brevity that makes your works unique. I love this!

And thank you for your kind reviews!

This is a very pretty and deep story, It's shame no one else has read it. I sure hope there is more to come. There could be more physical descriptions of characters though, and maybe a little history about demons and humans.

Its cute!!

I love your beginning, and I can't wait for the next chapter. Hope you update soon!