Ha, that was great. I'm glad you liked my stories so much. :D

Ok... so i decided to read your story cause u had to go through the torture to read mine. Well... i concluded that :

I ABSOLUTLY LOVE IT... so far! ^_^ i just love how your writing style is and how you say "alright, stop"

yes, i had not read this story passed chapter 10 until today - excuses include . . . well they're all lame lol I hadn't had time to do anything but post up my chapters and only just recently aquired some extra reading time. Yay.

Firstly great storyline, jack and nessa gots married, squee! yeah, don't ask lol

Nothing constructive to say (as per usual) and I can't praise you enough on actually finishing a story, something I have yet to achieve ^_^

Thank you for a wierd, out-of-this-world, funny read!

Now I am on my way to read "Meteour Flower" seeing it caught my interest. ^_^

Cassie

p.s I have updated The Game! yay! (after 7 months mind you -_-)

In response to your review,Zack Thompson, I would like to firstly thank you and secondly say that this story IS rated T, which is the equivalent of PG-13. So people do have fair warning that this isn't exactly a family-friendly story!

AHAH! I have finished within the day I would tell you I would read! Beat that, Lils. And and. Awesome work. You actually made me feel sad about Evander at that point O_o; But I was /still/ dissapointed to see him back.

Yep.

Wow, this is good. Very realistic dialogue. I am writing a book myself, taking place in the 1600's. I should post it here. Cool website, and you can even make reviews! Ok, for the actual review. I am a picky reader, so I will give you my honest-to-Bob (I am an Atheist, don't ask) truth. While the dialogue is very realistic (I'm assuming that it takes place in modern times), you MIGHT want to censor out a FEW of those cusses. If you're looking for readers of many ages, that is. A little hazy, but by the fifth paragraph I was hooked. I am interested to see where this story will go. I like the review of facts at the end. It made me understand the chapter better. Very nice word choice. Phrases like "...removing some magazines which cluttered it and flinging them uncaringly..." are ones I am particularly fond of. Overall, good rough draft. Just make everything a LITTLE clearer, please, and (provided you are looking for an audience younger than 15 too ^.^) words like ** (yes I cuss, but not EVERYONE does, many will find it repugnant), you might want to take out and replace with "crap". Ok. I'm done.-Zack

Ep! I was waiting for Jack and Nessa to get together. *tee hee* The ending to this story kept me on the edge of my chair! *claps* Bravo!

sounds cool. I liked Ian's monologue where he says "and please inform Miss Nessa that her little assault was quite painful? Thank you." I can just imagine a rather proper soldier (for me, Ian has a quasi-English accent, but whatever...) saying that in the middle of his explanation.

And I liked the entire epilogue.

I was glad to be of service for this story...

Over and out,:) CD

yup! completely and utterly confuzzled.

:) CD

Ian's reaction was quite amusing. and THANK YOU thankyouthankyouthankyou for not making it the undead peoples.

Now, is Evander from Earth? are these freakish soldier-people from Earth?

:) CD

ohmigoodgod... the UNDEAD!!

*screams and runs away* I'm not joking...

:) CD

It's a--a--a plague of clementines!! AH!

heeheehee.

This is a very descriptive chapter, especially the first paragraph. And I liked the conversation between Nessa and Jack.

:) CD

Very interesting so far...

must. keep. reading... It's very intriguing, I like the way you're writing it.

well. it's good to know that they won't die. or, at least, Fiona won't. wait a sec... Fiona, Nessa, Jack, Mariel. Jack only saw them? where's Evander and Ian, hmm?? in the vision I mean. Could it be that he saw them on another ship?

:) CD

Wow. This is freakin' AWESOME. No grammatical errors or anything.. it's pretty AWESOME like I said. Great job!