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| Anarkali 2006-02-06 ch 15,  | abuseyour best work so far =) its so rare to see the wife of a man caring so for the child of his other wife. But here we have Tita Mina, who is all nice and kind and not at all like the stepmothers of the fairy tales. But then maybe that's because this isn't a fairy tale. I would say this is the Pinoy version (somewhat) of "A Child Called It". I'm not saying its exactly like it; I'm just saying there are elements that are very similar in both stories.BUT it IS your best work, grammar-wise, style-wise, plot-wise, and impact-wise--so just submit it to the Palanca! |
| Anarkali 2006-01-27 ch 14, | abusethe introduction of information (eg. names, places, descriptions) is very gradual, which makes sure that the reader remembers more. :) |
| Anarkali 2006-01-27 ch 13, | abuseGershom...pagpalimbag ka na kasi ehh! :) at habang nagpapalimbag ka, sumali ka na ng Palanca...baka manalo ka pa... |
| Ranuko 2005-05-13 ch 5, anon. | abuse...mukha na itong kama pa ni Lapu-Lapu. ^_^ lol that's hilarious...hehe...wow...last time I was here, this was what? 1,2 chapters? ngayon pito na...grabe...kina-career mo ata 2 ah :D... |
| Masavi 2005-03-29 ch 1, | abuseI seriously need to learn how to speak tagalog. Ugh... my parents never taught me how to! But I can understand some of it... except. Darn... I can't read it. When I do find out how to speak tagalog and finally and truly be called filipino, I will get back to this story. Anyway, much love. Pinoy Pride. |
| bokkiewormie 2005-02-27 ch 1, anon. | abusenaliw ako at may tagalog na na istorya rito. hehe. susubaybayan ko to. sulat lang... |
| Ranuko 2005-02-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseHello =). Sa wakas nakapag-upload ka na. Maganda ang pagkasulat mo sa kwentong ito. Parang nakikita mong talagang nangyayari ang mga pangyayari. Punong-puno rin ito ng detalye.Realistiko an pagkakasulat; angkop ang pagpapakita mo sa mga katauhan, at mapangpaniwala ang personalidad ng Ina. Parang iba ang istilo na ginamit mo dito sa An Untitled piece of Eternal Love, pero mahusay rin ito.Sa tingin ko, masmahusay ang pagkasulat mo rito kaysa sa An Untitled Piece of Eternal Love(whew, haba ng pangalan). Kya Update!! |
| viajera de cuenca 2005-02-17 ch 1, | abuseParang familiar ang style mo...may kakilala ka bang writer na gumagamit ng pen name na proletaburgesya? Maganda. Ma-detalye. Unang kabanata pa lang ang nababasa ko, astig nang basahin. Maayos naman ang pagkakagawa mo sa buong istorya...may 'hint of reality'. Hm, medyo kulang ako sa oras ngayon...babasahin ko ang natitira pang mga kabanata sa susunod... |