the use of the parentheses really added to the flow of the poem. excellent job!

SP

this is very interesting, and at times it was a bit confusing to read. im not sure if thats how it was suppose to be, but it was still wonderful

you have a true gift and al you need to do is let it shine through through ur read my short story at geegi and my lord of the rings novel at geegi

thank yougeegi

nice poem... well written

er... that was kinda confusing the first time I read it, but then I read it again and I think I got it. nice job!

It's different unique, like it.

Quite interesting, I like the contrasts presented in this and the way you play with the notions of seeing/ not seeing or not wanting to see, opening/ closing, shutting in/ shutting out etc.

This again, like the other is a very emotionally strong piece of work. It's interesting and very farmiliar in some way I can't describe.