 not sure yet 2005-03-22 . chapter 1its a good story, i enjoyed the concept, it needs some cleaning up though, there are some sentences where i was very confused as to what exactly you meant, such as He imagined look at himself again- the person he was a year ago...and then i thought, looking? maybe or, i dunno, im a bit stupid in filling in blanks in sentences sometimes, i know there were a few others similar and just as stupid typos, but anywayz, good imagery in this as well, with the blue sweater, i saw that and his pose too, it was interesting, excellent job |