I liked this. The words used were very appealing, as was the voice of this piece. Trying to pick out a favourite line, but I love them all. Well done.

This is genius work.

Ok, maybe not genius, but very good. Very. It's got everything: vivid, clear, smooth, and most importantly, original.

There was just one thing. I had difficulty deciphering the general undercurrent of the poem. I got something, something vague dissapointment, but I couldn't quite define it. Although, I think this a kind of ambience piece, and isn't supposed to have much of a message. But it satisfies alright.

Nicely done! interesting things to bring in..certainly caught my attention! Loved 'Two bluebirds kiss on crayon branches' Keep writing =D

iridescent latex with some strange tips,

as i drive across the country gas stops,

for a few cents promise full ecstacy,

but i've never put four bits into slot,

for it seems a rush going in and out,

anxious to get back on asphalt highway,

mesmerizing strobe center dash line long.

(P.S.—your poem is absolutely grand. Reminds me of "Lush" the store that sells bubbling bath balls with all sorts of exotic names and colours and smells and tastes. m)