Hmm, I also don't ususally read poetry even thought I bought an entire book on it. It was sad because I couldn't understand what was going on. They were stories about the author's life. I ended up giving it to my friend who really likes poetry. *shrug* But I did like yours. They flow nicely with good images and sound nice too. ^_^

I think this has a lot of potential. Great formatting idea, it's rare that that's pulled off. The third and forth to last lines could use some inprovement, but I think the rest really held it's own. Great job!