once again unimportant you stun me. Nice with the the word choice. I luv the form you used. Slightly confusing at first but after a few seconds i caught on. (That might just be me though. I'm a little on the slow/speacil side)Much Love. "You're Killin me Small's" - Yeah-Yeah, Sandlot

I like how you went through the 'stages' of the trial and such. Scary how kids can do that sort of stuff and have no concence about it. Scary how anyone can do it, for that matter...

This poem is a strong piece. I really like the interlocking choruses. (I don't know how else to really describe them.) It really works well as a sort of rhyming support structure. Very original. You took a chance on this, and it paid off.

Very Nicely Done. I happen to completely agree with you, which always helps, but I also appreciate the language and layout you've chosen for this particular poem. It takes a great deal of talent to thread together two themes and make it work and you've certainly got the talent! Great job! Keep Writin'! ~*Mettie*~