I love the Ocean! This rocked!

Absolutely, positively beautiful! The imagery is amazing, the word structure is perfect for what you're trying to get across, and well - wow! This has to be my favorite work of yours so far, I'm completely in awe at how good this is.Now, I'm not sure how much my opinion matters because I don't know a lot about poetry (just what I've learned in my English classes), but I think you are doing a great job. Keep the good work.

Oh this is so beautiful and the imagery is great. The one thing I have to say is that while it was interesting to try and shape it like a foot, I'm not sure if it ended up well enough to truly add to the poem. This peice is so well written with such great imagery that if you maybe broke free of the shape-ness (that is so a word) of it all, it might grow into something truly absolutely amazing. But thats just an idea. If you don't think thats a good idea, then I'll just tell you that I definitly like it the way it is, and kudos to your writing style. It walks a beautiful line between prose and poetry.

~-{Rhapsodic}-~

This is just beautiful, Janessa. Very nicely done. It's sad with such a beautiful spin put onto it make the reader smile at the end. I truly enjoyed it - oh, and the shape thing was creative, too! Keep Writin'! ~*Mettie*~